tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9093983469819806548.post3826160717020312957..comments2023-03-30T10:16:59.102+01:00Comments on practice makes perfect: papersquare 006: Death and flowersUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9093983469819806548.post-19355257094344693412015-08-06T07:23:35.474+01:002015-08-06T07:23:35.474+01:00My beta reader has a high antipathy to 'was...My beta reader has a high antipathy to 'was' so I am learning to excise it when possible, as I am my over-frequent use of 'that'. That said, there often IS a place for it, more so than the total anti-wassers allow. ;-)Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9093983469819806548.post-72613284307876880412015-08-06T06:06:33.775+01:002015-08-06T06:06:33.775+01:00Thank you Gita and Sandra,
this was written for a ...Thank you Gita and Sandra,<br />this was written for a prompt in which a character is looking at a newspaper clipping - which I realise actually isn't in the piece now (although it was inspired by a news item on the high number of exhumations)<br />It is a rough draft so thanks for your helpful writing comments :)<br />practicehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05683589481404422674noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9093983469819806548.post-76546950956784035792015-08-05T22:46:09.634+01:002015-08-05T22:46:09.634+01:00I like the plot and characters but want to ask you...I like the plot and characters but want to ask you to edit out the use of the verb "to be" in some places. For example, "It was a couple of weeks after her Mum's funeral that Angela smiled." <br />And "The lowest point for Angela was when she left to go to university."<br /><br />Absolutely loved "sulkily squeezed into her teenage years."<br /><br />xoxo<br />GGita Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15548972027005254399noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9093983469819806548.post-49976170815871985422015-08-05T19:32:40.447+01:002015-08-05T19:32:40.447+01:00Rich and very, very wicked.Rich and very, very wicked.Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.com