tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9093983469819806548.post194761243099627508..comments2023-03-30T10:16:59.102+01:00Comments on practice makes perfect: Character Study: ClaireUnknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9093983469819806548.post-41863461896522068252010-02-23T16:35:08.944+00:002010-02-23T16:35:08.944+00:00Excellent! I was standing right there with Meliss...Excellent! I was standing right there with Melissa and Claire. You're really bringing "the office" to life.Teresa Cortezhttp://wabisabiwords.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9093983469819806548.post-15166861485312603592010-02-23T16:07:24.944+00:002010-02-23T16:07:24.944+00:00Its building along nicely. Perhaps try shorter sen...Its building along nicely. Perhaps try shorter sentences as their impact is better. Too many colons don't make for easy reading.Hasina Sulimanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06825823021096382496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9093983469819806548.post-48701494726957720392010-02-23T09:26:33.987+00:002010-02-23T09:26:33.987+00:00and, I am already falling in love with Claire...and, I am already falling in love with Claire...Sureindranhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02392601094414631609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9093983469819806548.post-39867441886359868662010-02-23T09:18:36.153+00:002010-02-23T09:18:36.153+00:00jkdavies, thanks for sharing the link. I am a fan ...jkdavies, thanks for sharing the link. I am a fan of sausages too!Sureindranhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02392601094414631609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9093983469819806548.post-17448617684156227842010-02-23T06:43:26.549+00:002010-02-23T06:43:26.549+00:00Claire is much more likeable, brown-red human,and ...Claire is much more likeable, brown-red human,and its good to get further insight into Melissa too.<br />I would have preferred in the 1st sentence, it to be made immediately obvious that 'the packet' was cigarettes - set me thinking along a different line.<br />'Gossip's instinct' needs an apostrophe.<br />When do we learn more about Hendrik & his nice arse? :)Sandra Daviesnoreply@blogger.com